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Two Sides of One Love by ~themexican-pi:iconthemexican-pi:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Song


I've begun to fall in love with you,
The person I can't tell my feelings to,
For your love belongs to another one,
With each loving word, more hurt is done,
I wish it was me your heart thought of,
It's getting harder and harder to hide my love,
My feelings are finally starting to come out,
Growing stronger and stronger without a doubt.

I will not tell you what I'm feeling in me,
Doing that could kill our friendship, you see,
This must always stayed sealed up inside,
Letting it out is now an option that's died.

There's something on your mind, I can tell,
Seems you're going through some kind of hell,
Lately, you seem to be looking so sad,
When I talk about him is when it gets bad,
....No, that really couldn't be the case,
Are you in love with me right in my face?
I do like you as a friend, you're really great,
But you know that he is my true soulmate.

Please don't be in love with me, dear friend,
My heart cannot belong to you in the end,
Causing heartbreak isn't something I'd want to do,
But you cannot ask me to love either him or you.

You and I have been great friends for a while,
We've been through many things, many trials,
I've laughed with you on those days having fun,
I've cried with you when you needed someone,
I would never want to lose you, I wouldn't dare,
Your place in my heart will always be there,
This situation could change both you and I,
Wanting love could make any friendship die...

I will not tell you what I'm feeling in me,
Please don't be in love with me, dear friend,
Doing that could kill our friendship, you see,
My heart cannot belong to you in the end,
This must always stayed sealed up inside,
Causing heartbreak isn't something I'd want to do,
Letting it out is now an option that's died.
But you cannot ask me to love either him or you.
©2004-2009 ~themexican-pi
:iconthemexican-pi:

Author's Comments

Well, since some people actually told me that I could write songs, I gave one a shot! Believe me, this one was harder than my normal writing, but then again, it's not my normal writing style either. I got the idea for the structure by listening to Whiskey Lullabye by Brad Paisley. The idea was doing a poem from two different points of view, something I've never done before, and especially if I'm not in both sides, I don't quite know how to write the second part. But I did try, I hope you guys like how it came out, it's my first, so any comments, good or bad, are really appreciated. The bold is one person, the italics is the other, and the bold italics is both people speaking together.

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=mythicaldamienne Sep 7, 2004, 5:22:28 PM
I can really hear this in my head. Very haunting, very wanting. You did a good job for your first try at song writing. As I am no expert at lyrics writing, I really can't point out fault that way...I like the way this rhymes and the way it feels as I read it. A touching tribute to the depths of feeling the heart has...and seeing it from both sides. I'd like to hear this to music one day.

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~themexican-pi Sep 7, 2004, 5:32:20 PM
Thanks, haunting, you say? Wasn't expecting that word, but hey, that's cool too. :D I'm glad you liked it, it was hard to do the second point of view because I've never been in that situation, just always the other side. Thanks again, I really do appreciate your comments.

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"What is the cure for cancer,
The cure for death itself?

The answer is IMMORTALITY."

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~LastMorbidRose Sep 7, 2004, 5:34:10 PM
I like! The 2 points of veiw thing worked really well ^_^ you make it so that i can understand both veiws n all! way awesome hun!

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~CrImSoNrEgReTs666 Sep 7, 2004, 5:42:34 PM
it made me cry...i was thinking of me and matt....*tear*

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:boing: *You are my sunshine my only sunshine, you make me happy when skys are grey, youll never know dear how much i love you, so please dont take my sunshine away* :sun:
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~themexican-pi Sep 7, 2004, 5:46:50 PM
Thanks, I'm glad I showed both sides well enough! ^_^

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"What is the cure for cancer,
The cure for death itself?

The answer is IMMORTALITY."

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~themexican-pi Sep 7, 2004, 5:48:41 PM
Thanks, I'm glad I showed both sides well enough! ^_^

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"What is the cure for cancer,
The cure for death itself?

The answer is IMMORTALITY."

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~themexican-pi Sep 7, 2004, 5:49:47 PM
:( I'm sorry. Well, at least I showed the emotion correct, right?

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"What is the cure for cancer,
The cure for death itself?

The answer is IMMORTALITY."

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!Nemira-the-Muse Sep 7, 2004, 5:58:48 PM
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW. Memories. :tear: Well done. Much improvement from the first draft.

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Hopes are for the lazy. Wishes are for the ignorant. Dreams are for the passive. But love... love is for those who would risk heaven and hell, broken hearts and tears, just to be wrapped up in their arms once more.
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~themexican-pi Sep 7, 2004, 6:00:53 PM
Thanks, it wasn't easy to work from a draft, though, glad you liked it!

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"What is the cure for cancer,
The cure for death itself?

The answer is IMMORTALITY."

member of ~Emotional-Writings, =PoetryPlease, *Circleoffriends
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~LastMorbidRose Sep 7, 2004, 6:07:40 PM
^^ yea ya did a grand job hun!

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